Thieves
My name is Cyril. I’m the king of thieves and this is about my
worst plan ever.
“I’ve got an idea, let’s steal the crown jewels.” “Don’t you think that
is a bit risky because the last time we did something like that thirty of us
were captured?” Larry said concerned. “I think it’s a great idea.” said someone
sitting in the back row. “So we’ll go right away.” But it went wrong horribly
wrong and two guards started to chase me and I ran.
Petrified, exhausted, breathless, I ran as fast as humanly possible, for
dread this might be the end.
A bit lost in some parts but it's still good
ReplyDeleteSaffy from the Wyche
ReplyDeleteIt is a very exciting story but just remember new speaker new line which means you can't have two peoples speech on one line.
Sam E
ReplyDeleteIt's very good but you need a bit more punctuation