The wrong day
If only I hadn’t been at the park that day, if only the boy hadn’t done
it, if only there wasn’t a crocodile, then I wouldn’t have seen what I saw!
Now, what I saw wasn’t very nice, it was horrible! What I saw was a boy
swinging on a very weak piece of string and swinging over a crocodile. The boy
was surrounded by other people so I wasn’t alone. As the rope snapped the boy
screamed and fell into the jaws of the monster. When this happened his mum and
dad where screaming, “Hey, those were new trunks!”
Audrey - I love it! Such a twist at the end when the parents are more concerned about the boys trunks than their own son! A very clever piece of writing and superb use of the IF, IF ,IF Then sentence!
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Mr W
very funny LOL !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI liked the last bit because it was funny. I thought his mum and dad would be screaming because the crocodile had just eaten their child!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteReally good i love how you made it so some one is looking at the boy instead of being the boy.
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