A
gift from Hell!
Buzzzzzzzz!!

From the UFR
1821 Hell Lane
Land of the un forgiving Realm (LOTUFR)
He11 1SH
That’s a strange address I think I’ll find it in the yellow
pages. It isn't here! I’ll open the package,
it’s a phone! Cool I’m going to phone my friend, wait what’s happening it’s rapping
up my hand; my body is being taken over!! ARRRRRRR!! The more I scream the more
the world fades around me…
oh my god thats sooooooooooo cool the way you engage the reader is EPIC
ReplyDeleteIt is really good I like the way you engage the reader but maybe you could use a wider range of vocabulary
ReplyDeleteA chilling vision of the future!
ReplyDeleteScary - but is it so fanciful?
Fantastic writing Beulah.
Dan Pallett
BBC Midlands Today