Thursday, 8 May 2014

Tia's 100 word challenge


Mr Warne's bad day

I was walking to school and when I got there I went to the cloakroom to hang my coat and p.e bag up like usual.When I entered the classroom I put my liason book in the box and put my other things that I needed to hand in,in the purple tray.Then I bumped in to my friend ,Mia.After a short chat we had enough time to play until lessons started It didn't take long before the teacher blew the whistle.We all went to our classes.Mr Warne was taking the register when he started acting strange. Suddenly,Mr.Warne turned a deeper shade of red and steam could be seen from his ears.   
 

4 comments:

  1. Vicky and Eleanor9 May 2014 at 03:25

    really good but, maybe you could work on punctuation, over all it is a good piece of work.

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  2. Well done Tia very realistic

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  3. Hi I like your work it was intresting ,maybe next time you could right a bit more about the ,over all it was good

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  4. really good Tia really liked the end sentence manly cause the steam coming out of his ears.

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