Saturday 27 September 2014

ollie cookes 100 word challenge

If I wasn't so good at talking to animals, if the crocodile wasn't so nice, if I wasn't so lucky, then I wouldn't be alive right now. I was on holiday when I saw a rope swing across a river. I thought “what fun!”  and without thinking I swung on it. The rope snapped! I fell into the river. I hadn't realized it was a crocodile infested river so I started to panic. The crocodile silently sneaked towards me and  was just about to eat me when I begged him not to ruin my holiday. Amazingly he let me escape.

3 comments:

  1. Well done I think yours is good because it is different. Others have said they got hurt by the croc but you didn't. Great story but I would like to see more puntuation.

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  2. Great If, If, If, Then sentence.

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  3. Funny story using the 'if, if, if' to start

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