“What shall we do today” asked Jim
“I don’t know” replied Jack. Then this sheet came flying
over Jack snatched at it and it got away and the boys started to chase this
piece of paper and it took them to a grand pink gorilla! The boys were stunned then
they laughed and ran swiftly away but then the grand pink gorilla started to
chase them on his bicycle…By now the boys were afraid by this gorilla but the
gorilla thought it was a game! The boys ran into their house and they have
never ever gone back to the park where the gorilla is.
Aha! It's great but there is this tiny place that could do with a comma
ReplyDeleteyes I see where Phoebe, but its really good. that has happened to me at the park, with a poodle!
ReplyDeleteha thanks guys for the comments and advice
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