107 word challenge
I’ve been at sea for 3 years now, I
still miss my friends but it makes me feel happy to know that they missed me
to. I live on this boat with my mum and dad and 2 brothers; I’m the only girl in
a family of boys but at least I have my mum, my dog, Nemo. One day Danny and
Ben (my brothers) were arguing and Nemo was barking at them. Mum was below deck
reading the map; she was used to the arguing. Ben accidentally pushed Danny and
I into the water. We screamed but all we could see was water.
Nice Ella but maybe a bit more adjectives?
ReplyDeletetoo be honest its quite scary but i love it!!!!!
ReplyDeleteElla-That is very good and scary but maybe you could use some more describing words
ReplyDeleteunexpected ending Ella
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