Harry time for school….
“Five more minutes please”
said Harry
“HARRY your bus is here!”
“What! why did you not tell
me?”
“I did” said mum.
On the way to school Harry
was playing catch with his ball, his friend missed it, as it flew down the bus
where upon his enemy Bob kicked it in the air and it hit the driver. Harry felt
he had got punched in the stomach as the driver drove right into a hedge.
The next day Harry his friend
Jacob and Bob were sitting in horrible detention all hoping this was a dream…
We really liked it, great use of vacab and punctuation. We liked the humour used in this piece of writing.
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Leah, Liza and Evie
Your 100wc is very good put you can improve upon your final paragraph.
ReplyDeleteJohn
I really liked that I couldn't stop reading
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