CLOUD VISITS NEW YORK
On the 2nd of June 2014 a cloud appeared to float over the streets of New York. David Phillips, a witness of what happened in the streets that day said "I saw a cloud head from the Hudson river direction, it then carried on over the city as if it were alive". Locals say after it had passed through the bustling center of New York it flew through the air picking up more moisture as it travelled and used this to put out the flames of a very strong fire that was burning in the east side of the city.
Excellent use of a direct quote to give this writing authenticity (Make it believable) I also liked how you used specific names e.g Hudson river
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Well done Emma - nice compact 100wc article
I liked it that you added in a quote from an eye witness!
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