Monday 19 January 2015

Henry's 100 word challenge

Petrified,exhausted,breathless I ran as fast as humanly possible for dread that this might be the end.  Slipping sliding through the forest I trembled hopelessly over the treacherous tree roots and the desolate pathway. I heard a faint spine-chilling noise in the distance. Shortly followed by a scream, a terrifying, bloodcurdling scream. I ran over to the noise. There before me stood three, atramentous, shadowy figures each holding a gun covered in sticky, blood that was as red as fire. It was pointed at me. I began to feel like I would be their next victim. The chase had begun.

12 comments:

  1. Brilliant, wish there was more!!!
    Charlie from the Wyche

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  2. Henry from the Wyche
    Wow that is brilliant the one thing you might need to improve don't start a sentence with I but apart from that it is brilliant 😀

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  3. Henry from the Wyche
    Wow that is brilliant the one thing you might need to improve don't start a sentence with I but apart from that it is brilliant 😀

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  4. Amelia from the Wyche.
    That was really good and I want to know what happens next.

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  5. Elliot from the Wyche CE primary school

    That is really good 😄

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  6. Good sentence starters, this is a good story to make the reader read on

    Eleanor from the Wyche school.

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  7. I really like the sentence starters and you have used really good words in there.

    from Ruby from the Wyche School

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  8. Catherine from the Wyche School
    Wow, who are the people with the guns!? If this were a story instead of a hundred word challenge, then I would love to hear more!

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  9. I really like the sentence starters and you have used really good vocab.

    from Ruby at the Wyche

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  10. I really like your story it's awesome! I think you could make some of your sentences longer.
    From Tara from the Wyche primary school

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  11. We think it is very gripping we just want to read on and on
    By TIa and Phoebe.m at malvern wells school.

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  12. why shouldn't i start a sentence with I Henry?

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