If I knew the lighthouse was that bad I wouldn't of entered,
If I knew we would be in danger,
If I knew there was no going back: it was too late now!
I warned my friend, Sam, but she is so adventurous she insisted. We made our way into the battered crumbling lighthouse that reminded me of a burnt down ruin. The windows were shattered, and a chill ran down my spine. We both looked in chorus to find in the corner of the room, a small, old lamp. Suddenly the light flickered in the wind, all went quiet!!!
By Chloe
This is a very good peice of writing because of your different sentence types(e.g If,if,if then sentence). I loved it when you engaged the reader by saying ' a chill ran down my spine!' I also love the desciption about the lighthouse! Good use of exclamation marks for effect! You should be proud of this work, well done!
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