Who let the crocs out?
If I had not gone on holiday, if I had been more sensible, if
the water was not infested with crocodiles, then I would not have found myself
in this mess.
I was swinging across the
river on a rope swing when I realised that when the holiday brochure said “exciting
rope swing adventure.” What it really meant was that swinging across a
crocodile infested river was “exciting”! At that moment the jaws of the hungry crocodile
snapped only centimetres away from my feet. I finally managed to swing safely
back onto dry land. I was exhausted but
surprisingly alive.
By Eleanor
I love your idea of being on holiday and you have used great description but more punctuation could be used
ReplyDeletei really liked it and mabey you can tell how you got te dry land
ReplyDeleteI like your story it grips the reader and is exiting but, maybe think about using more punctuation next time.
ReplyDeleteOllie cooke