Henry's Writing challenge

The slash of the cane reverberated around the classroom as shrieks of agony were heard from outside the door Mr Adams thundered in,his eyes bulged as his face turned a deeper shade of red.

Then john walked in he was short thin and dirty, his hands stung with pain as a single tear drizzled down his pale face."Now class!" Mr Adams exclaimed "I hope you've all learnt a lesson today!"
His eyes turned to John as Mr Adams' face turned back to its original colour